Half & Half by Grey Huffington
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Blurb:
I was open for him.
All night & all day.
Just like the coffee shop I’d met him at that day luck was on my side.
It was one cup of coffee.
My last five dollars.
And a sign of good faith.
Who’d ever known the man I given my last to would be Levee Billion, prominent figure and one of Huffington Mill’s most eligible bachelors. Did I mention he was filthy fxcking rich?
Just before he slid into his foreign whip, he’d left my mind in a frenzy and my body on fire. One wink and a thank you note with his number attached.
“Call me if you’re ever in need.”
Of course I was in need.
I had been since the day I smelled his obnoxious cologne.
Witnessed his intoxicating smile.
Been blessed with his lingering presence.
I’d become addicted.
His absence was vexatious.
Even, now, the thought of our differences keeping us apart had me strung out and stressed out.
Review + Rating
1.5 out of 5 stars
1.5 out of 5 stars
I have
so many thoughts.
As
I've said on previous occasions, I really don't like to harp on grammatical
errors, in books. BUT, I couldn't possibly ignore the numerous errors, and
inconsistencies presented in this novel.
So,
I've never read a Grey novel before--and to be honest, I thought it was
Erotica. Erotica is not necessarily my cup of tea. However, in my continuous
attempt to support black literature, feelings and preconceived notions, be
damned--I picked it up.
M'am.
This
book.
(It's
not Erotica, btw.)
I
am in a state of confusion.
So
many unrealistic situations, illogical explanations, misspellings--and
inconsistencies, made Jazmen, an unhappy reader.
Heartleigh
is having the time of her life--and not in a good way. She's down to her last
seven dollars, itching for a marijuana fix, in need of a job--everything is
dangling on the precipice of failure and destruction.
She
takes herself to a coffee shop and stumbles across Levee Billion, who somehow
has left his wallet at home--when Heartleigh offers her last dime to help him
get his caffeine fix.
He
sends her his contact info via air drop with the promise of being there, ONLY,
if she explicitly needs him.
She
does.
Desperately.
Before
talking about what I griped about in the beginning, let's briefly talking
about, Levee.
He
was something else. Social awkwardness, and a penance for not talking--made it
difficult to connect with his character.
He
was hardened, and unfamiliar with how to work, in and around social situations
that perplexed him, giving off the sense of autism in a way.
While
it did make it hard to connect with him, it wasn't solely because he barely
spoke--but if a character doesn't speak there should be a sense of the
character in their back story and actions.
There
was a lack of that.
Being
a kid that had it rough socially just wasn't enough to get me in.
Levee,
was just, something.
Between
him and Heartleigh, I'm not sure which character concerned me more.
Heartleigh
was completely and utterly unsure of herself, and her path in life--and Levee
was just as lost.
I
would say in a sense, they helped find one another--but I don't see how they
helped each other singularly.
The
insta-love in this one was rushed, unbelievable and unconvincing.
Levee
is so hard to like and although Heartleigh is supposed to be this strong black
chick--I wasn't buying into it.
There
was a lack of emotional depth that kept me from being pulled in.
On
top of all of that, the structure, the grammar, and the inconsistencies I
mentioned previously, was the nail in the proverbial coffin.
Example
one:
"She
apologized for my mistake. So fucking perfect. Too dedicated to my thoughts of
her, I neglected to pay attention to where I was going and collided with the
brazen beauty. My large frame flung her into the wall of the narrow hallway.
The collision shoved me in the same direction, but I used the wall behind us to
weaken the reaction."
What
laws of gravity are we using here? I've never heard of one person bumping into
the other without a third party and being propelled into the same direction.
Not
physically possible, and a forced and unrealistic interaction.
Example
#2: The frequent misspelling use of the word memorize in place of the word
mesmerize.
"Her
staring back as I gazed into her memorizing rounds." (I won't even dwell
on how the word rounds, used to describe eyes is just odd.)
Emotions
reflected on the skin of a character?
"Gasping
as defeat covered her pretty brown skin,..."
There
were moments where complete sections and/or paragraphs were repeated for
dramatic effect.
Words
were misspelled and mis-used, and I can honestly see where there was a lack of
good editing--or any editing at all.
My
well-being was always top prior to her, and that shit made me all squishy
inside. (Priority, belongs here.)
These
examples may seem trivial or petty, when taken outside of the context of the
novel--but they were numerous--and cumbersome to the story itself.
To
be honest, even with proper editing, this story wouldn't have worked, at least
not for me. It's just not good writing.
It's
not to say I can't see what the author was trying to do, the execution was just
off. Way off.
I'm
surprised by the rave reviews, because this book was bad--blatantly bad, in
ways it didn't need to be.
I'm
supremely disappointed.
Supremely,
and my expectations were none.
I
did decide to try another series of her books, and you can see how I felt about
those in my next review.
Did
the author redeem herself? Find out!
This was a very detailed review! I definitely understand being bothered by misspellings, grammar errors, etc. A few books I read recently had some errors and I found it completely took me out of the story!
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